Hell_Cat_18 1,359 Report post Posted January 15, 2006 ~*Bloody Rain*~ A bloody rain Falls on the fight to stay sane Never to rest or see the light My worst nightmares haunt the night Every moment is cold and dark My song as silent as the dead lark Here and now waiting to die This is where I will forever lie In the end it seems so wrong That I've had to endure this so long Left inside my dying shell Only the shadows my story will tell The light has gone and so must I A haunted sob escapes as I begin to cry They come at last silent and cold The chains to my life their clawed hands hold Standing before the demon ties One by one they shout my lies Pushed to the ground down on my knees They only laugh at my sob ridden plees The blade raised high and ready stands Falling down with a death dealing sigh A silent scream my final word As I fall into the fires of my own created world... 1 Pchan reacted to this [sIGPIC]What's wrong, cat eat your tounge?[/sIGPIC] Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Sabe 2,444 Report post Posted January 16, 2006 Damn...that is...wow. It reminds me of "Faust" for some reason. Nice... "There's no such thing as can't. You always have a choice."--Ken Gor, Ying hung boon sik II [sIGPIC]Dattebayo!!![/sIGPIC] Thank you to everyone who has ever made me sigs, you are all wonderful! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
GundamFreakX 836 Report post Posted January 16, 2006 Hell Cat, you make some of the greatest poems ever. I enjoy reading them all, and this one is no exception. Excellent job. Fooly Cooly is when you do this with your hands... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Hell_Cat_18 1,359 Report post Posted January 16, 2006 Thank you so much guys, I was afraid no one would like it. It means a lot to me that you guys like them so much. *huggles and licks* [sIGPIC]What's wrong, cat eat your tounge?[/sIGPIC] Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
boondock_saint 294 Report post Posted January 17, 2006 coolies... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Pchan 5,162 Report post Posted January 17, 2006 *huggles and licks* *is licked by accident* Hehe, cool poem HC. Sabe, you're talking if that German alchemist guy ne ? I am putting myself to the fullest possible use, which is all I think that any conscious entity can ever hope to do. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Sabe 2,444 Report post Posted January 17, 2006 Sabe, you're talking if that German alchemist guy ne ? Off Topic: Alchemist, Necromancer, Doctor...fool. Yeah, that'd be him. Doctor Faustus, from Goeth's play. "There's no such thing as can't. You always have a choice."--Ken Gor, Ying hung boon sik II [sIGPIC]Dattebayo!!![/sIGPIC] Thank you to everyone who has ever made me sigs, you are all wonderful! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Hell_Cat_18 1,359 Report post Posted January 17, 2006 Thanx GG and Boondock *huggles and licks for you too* Off Topic: Great to see you back Boondock [sIGPIC]What's wrong, cat eat your tounge?[/sIGPIC] Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
wolfos3d 803 Report post Posted January 18, 2006 Wow!! Great poem HC. Best one I've read in a while. [sIGPIC][/sIGPIC] Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Gelmir_of_the_crows 132 Report post Posted January 30, 2006 As any other time, I love your writing. I'm sure many of us have had these times. For you I'm afraid they they haunt you much like your dreams and the shadows that falls with the evening light. But know that I will alway try as hard as I can to hold the sun in the sky. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Honeybee 29 Report post Posted March 4, 2006 this one is similar to you other one but carries in a different direction i think you used die to much in the begining and i was kind of seeing a different ending My song as silent as the dead lark you shouldn't use that many as' it takes away from the effect Left inside my dying shell this is my favorite line i can see it, and i think i represents your poem well http://img515.imageshack.us/my.php?image=siggy30hi.png Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Hell_Cat_18 1,359 Report post Posted March 4, 2006 Thanx Honeybee, and yeah I'm trying to work on using the same word twice in the same line. I'm actually trying to get my writting back, I actually kinda lost it there for awhile, but I thank you for your comments. [sIGPIC]What's wrong, cat eat your tounge?[/sIGPIC] Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
