Dark's Angel 226 Report post Posted February 4, 2006 Calming Hearts and Spirits The blue-green waves splash around my ankles As I walk down the beach The roar of the ocean waves calms me but my mind still is a turbulent mess. I go for a swim among the fish to calm my spirit But that doesn't work either. I try sunbathing with my friends To calm my crying heart But that fails too. Is there anything that will help me? My heart is crying but I really don't know why. Is it because you left me? I keep telling myself it was for the best. My spirit is restless And my mind is a mess right now. My mind is urging me to go somewhere I'm not sure where to go. I'll be on the road until My heart stops crying And my spirit settles. Alone The darkness of the shadows The eerie mist that clings in the darkness What is going to happen? The full moon is hanging overhead And I'm all alone The hooting of the owls And the rustling of the leaves Makes it even more evident That you left and that no one's here for me. I wonder if there's anyone else like me Alone wandering, staring at the moon Wondering why they were left Wondering why they were now alone too. I see the rain and it doesn't make me sad. My heart is a black hole and no one can save me from it. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
CabbitGirl 4,018 Report post Posted February 4, 2006 those were very good == Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Dark's Angel 226 Report post Posted February 4, 2006 Thanks. I wrote them when I was feeling a little down and the words just came out. I see the rain and it doesn't make me sad. My heart is a black hole and no one can save me from it. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
D_Marx 604 Report post Posted February 9, 2006 Pretty. I could feel everything you projected. Don't forget to talk about it later so we can bash the bastard who made you sad. [sIGPIC][/sIGPIC] D_Marx Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Honeybee 29 Report post Posted March 4, 2006 My mind is urging me to go somewhere ^ that was the strongest line in your first poem it drives completly mad, because its such a burning notion that you cant regect that can run you up the wall. because while you wish for it to leave it will stay binding you almost crushing you driving you into a panic because you can not answer it it has to die away and it devors you slowly do you really live near a forest of some sort that you wander in? http://img515.imageshack.us/my.php?image=siggy30hi.png Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Dark's Angel 226 Report post Posted March 4, 2006 Something like that but not quite. There's a big wooded area by my house that I wander around in sometimes. It's just woods that I live by but I'd love to live near the real forest... I see the rain and it doesn't make me sad. My heart is a black hole and no one can save me from it. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Honeybee 29 Report post Posted March 4, 2006 what do you see when you hear the word alone? do you see a moon? do you see a person wondering the same thing as you? do you see darkness? do you see light? I see mist what do you see? http://img515.imageshack.us/my.php?image=siggy30hi.png Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Dark's Angel 226 Report post Posted March 4, 2006 I see a mix of things when I hear the word alone. I see a lonely person, the moon, darkness, sometimes the stars, and mist. My imagination gets warped sometimes with some words... I see the rain and it doesn't make me sad. My heart is a black hole and no one can save me from it. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Honeybee 29 Report post Posted March 4, 2006 try writting what you see insted of what you know as the ideal image of alone http://img515.imageshack.us/my.php?image=siggy30hi.png Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Dark's Angel 226 Report post Posted March 4, 2006 Most of the time I write what I feel but that would be a different way to write... I see the rain and it doesn't make me sad. My heart is a black hole and no one can save me from it. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Honeybee 29 Report post Posted March 4, 2006 seeing is still feeling http://img515.imageshack.us/my.php?image=siggy30hi.png Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
