Hell_Cat_18 1,359 Report post Posted February 10, 2006 ~*Left Behind*~ Take me with you Please don't leave me here I'll hide away In the back I promise to stay Silent and smiling But deep inside I'm crying Once again you've left me behind Maybe someone should do to you in kind Forgoten again I don't know where to begin All I have is a silent night This was never right You've left me behind Now I do to you in kind Silent nights are now your friend This wound will never mend Load the gun and pull the trigger Your new friend is the grave digger You left me behind And now...I do to you in kind... [sIGPIC]What's wrong, cat eat your tounge?[/sIGPIC] Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Dark's Angel 226 Report post Posted February 10, 2006 I like it. It has a sad and angsty feel to it and I can relate to it in some ways. I can feel the emotion flowing off of every line. This person left you behind...now you're going to leave him behind. I like this part of it alot. "I'll hide away In the back I promise to stay Silent and smiling But deep inside I'm crying Once again you've left me behind Maybe someone should to to you in kind Forgoten again" You most likely don't want to show that you're crying. You have to be strong for you're own sake... 1 Hell_Cat_18 reacted to this I see the rain and it doesn't make me sad. My heart is a black hole and no one can save me from it. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Hell_Cat_18 1,359 Report post Posted February 10, 2006 Wow...I think that's the first time that someone has ever read that deep into my writting. Thank you from the bottom of my heart...it means a lot to me. [sIGPIC]What's wrong, cat eat your tounge?[/sIGPIC] Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Gelmir_of_the_crows 132 Report post Posted February 12, 2006 As you writing always does. I have been touched and warned all the same time. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Hell_Cat_18 1,359 Report post Posted February 12, 2006 I didn't really mean for it to be a warning...I was venting in all reality. Anywho...I'm glad you like it. [sIGPIC]What's wrong, cat eat your tounge?[/sIGPIC] Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Honeybee 29 Report post Posted March 4, 2006 nice ending i kind of wanted more discription but in the same time not because while the imagery was jumbled in my mind one of the many messages i found in that poem was clear and cold http://img515.imageshack.us/my.php?image=siggy30hi.png Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Hell_Cat_18 1,359 Report post Posted March 4, 2006 That was definatly what I was going for...I've noticed that I've had a bit of a problem lately getting imagery into my poems. I think it's because I'm expressing my feelings more so than events. [sIGPIC]What's wrong, cat eat your tounge?[/sIGPIC] Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
