Wolflord 1,488 Report post Posted February 3, 2007 A long fucking while, and it just kinda came out. Tell me what you think >.> Boy and Girl There once was a boy. He loved a girl. The girl loved the boy's best friend. They dated for a while, but the boy's best friend treated the girl badly. It made the boy sad to see her pain. The boy's best friend didn't care about her, treated her badly, and made the girl cry, although he didn't know it. Things weren't going well for a long time, and it made the boy sad. The boy's best friend eventually broke up with the girl. He didn't care. The girl was sad. That night the girl went to the boy's house. The boy and his friend eagerly awaited her arrival. The boy felt happy that he was going to see her again. He also knew the girl was going to need a shoulder to cry on, and that would be him. He felt exultant. The girl came over, she didn't cry. She took it well, and managed to have fun despite her pain. She accepted it as part of life, and moved on. The boy felt happy that she wasn't so sad, but he also felt sad that she didn't need someone to cry on. The girl moved on that night, but the boy never did. Looking back, the boy felt sad that he was so desperate and pathetic as to use a girl's pain for his own gain. He also felt shame at not even realizing it until later. Looking back he also felt proud that the girl took it so well, and moved on. He also felt terrible for feeling sadness that she didn't display her emotions in a physical manner. The boy still loves the girl, and always will. He lies in bed awake at night, praying to nothing for her safety and happiness. He knows that if he meets her again 10 years down the road, he'll still love her. And when they're both 90 years old, whether they meet or not, the boy will still see the girl as his 16 year old queen who made life worth living. 1 CabbitGirl reacted to this aomsehri \|/ This post is definitely my greatest contribution to the site. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
falling-angel-111 736 Report post Posted February 4, 2007 Like I said before, I really like it. I kinda feel like it's missing something though, like a part were the boy beats up his best friend? j/k "A penny for your thoughts but a dollar for your insides, or a fortune for your disaster." Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
daymost 875 Report post Posted February 5, 2007 I like it come fome the heart. It seems like that boy was you. At lest your not daymost Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Ladywriter 7,783 Report post Posted February 7, 2007 aww its cute Look at the flowers Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
CabbitGirl 4,018 Report post Posted February 7, 2007 very good composition youve put together. everything is stated straight forward but not too much was said either. just enough to convey a point. =3 i liked it, good job ^^ Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Moon Doggie 220 Report post Posted February 8, 2007 I got confused but it was good *thumbs up*, teehee!! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Wolflord 1,488 Report post Posted February 11, 2007 I like it come fome the heart. It seems like that boy was you. Daymost, sometimes you make me want to die. More than usual that is. No offense meant aomsehri \|/ This post is definitely my greatest contribution to the site. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
daymost 875 Report post Posted February 12, 2007 Want to die in a good way or bad way? Nan you can’t offend that easy, I jus hope I didn’t offend you. At lest your not daymost Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Wolflord 1,488 Report post Posted February 16, 2007 rofl It's a pretty hard to offend me But I'm not sure if it's die in a good or bad way aomsehri \|/ This post is definitely my greatest contribution to the site. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
