Gelmir_of_the_crows 132 Report post Posted November 3, 2007 I'm leaving now I'll be gone for awhile When I return I'd like to see your smile If your not there I'll understand Not everyone can stand with time at hand I don't expect for them to know what I say It's you that makes me want to stay My words may be soft My phrases not aways so good What I what from this is simple A smile A grin A small laugh and I win. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kelene 268 Report post Posted November 4, 2007 Very nice, your rhymes are creative. Great job [sIGPIC][/sIGPIC] Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Gelmir_of_the_crows 132 Report post Posted November 5, 2007 Thank you. It's not one of my better ones though. I seem to have run out of ideas lately to write on. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Ladywriter 7,783 Report post Posted November 5, 2007 cute Look at the flowers Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Gelmir_of_the_crows 132 Report post Posted November 5, 2007 thanks. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
HKofsesshoumaru 673 Report post Posted November 5, 2007 Nice. I like that last line. [sIGPIC][/sIGPIC] "Well, Toutousai...don't you think it's a pity for Tessaiga? All Inuyasha can do is wave about a sword with all his strength...it's the same whether it's a famous sword or a log." -Sesshoumaru Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Moon Doggie 220 Report post Posted November 5, 2007 *claps* wow Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Gelmir_of_the_crows 132 Report post Posted November 6, 2007 That last line fits me as per that phrase. I thought that it could use that little touch. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
